1. a) I can talk in greater detail of how earning a baccalaureate degree doesn't make someone intelligent.
b) I can give personal examples rather than examples of someone else to show that I know what I am talking about.
c) Earning a baccalaureate degree does not signify someone as being intelligent, nor does not having that degree make someone unintelligent. Intelligence cannot be learned in a book, rather by experience and life lessons.
A very close friend of mine, who never went to college and only received a high school diploma, has told me countless times that he has learned more working the job he is working now than he has ever learned in school. Now, learning through life experiences like that make a person intelligent because intelligence isn't something learned in a book.
2. a) I'm not sure of the answer to put here, but I reviewed pages 4 and 5.
b) I think that my topic sentences all reflect what is going to be talked about in the paragraph. I don't plan on changing them.
3. a) Certain cultures do not recognize any form of degree as a sign of intelligence. In some foreign countries, people do not have the privilege to go to school and earn a degree if they want. They identify intelligent people by judging how they make a living with what they have, such as being able to feed their families, keep them safe and clothed and protecting them. When they learn those things, they are considered intelligent people. Degree's, which are earned from books, are not acknowledged in other countries, therefore, they are not a deal breaker on whether someone is intelligent.
b) I could give more examples of what these people do to make a living. I could identify who these "people" are and where they live. I could go into more detail of the countries and their cultures to give the reader a better understanding.
4. a) I haven't gotten around to making the old and new rebuttals, but the one I have made up is
"It is a fact that people who receive a formal education have a better chance of succeeding in life than someone who has not., but it all depends on the attitude and effort put forth by the person in order to succeed. If a person is determined enough to become a success, then they will find a way to make it happen."
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